Btw - I'm still reading the last version you gave me, I don't want to move on to the re-written one till I've read this version. I hope that isn't gonna cause me a problem?
Ok 11...
Sorry, have to mention the grammar again (I know you've worked on it for the new version, so this might be pointless to bring it up, but anyway

So with this chapter we get to meet new characters again. All in all that's fine, and I like Carson, I'm interested to hear about him and Luc.
I think though that it feels a little too far into the story to start again, if you get my drift. There's a big difference between the Harper/Bourne stuff and this new stuff - which I know is what you're striving for... but it does feel like the story is starting again from the beginning.
So how about splitting it into "Parts" or something? I was thinking have the earlier stuff as part 1 and then start part 2 either with the Katrina stuff a couple of chapters back, or with this new Carson stuff. I'd have to read more to know which would be best, but I think it would prepare the reader more for a big change in setting (kind of like how in GotM book 1 is with the Malazans, book 2 is in Darujhistan etc).
The bit with the cop (Harry) is well done, with a kind of surprise ending. It's very good for a cop drama-style piece.
I have to say though that I'm beginning to feel a jar when the genre switches from one to another. On the whole, each style of writing (e.g. fantasy, horror, cop drama, military) is very good within itself, but when you switch from one to another like here, it feels a little off-putting, and the worlds don't seem to connect properly. It's very hard to get an image of how one thread connects to another. From reading your posts about it, I'd guess that you've intended for it to be like that, but I'm having trouble with it tbh. Maybe having separate parts would help with this, I'm not sure.
Chapter 12... only read a little here.
The opening scene is pretty good... I like how you set Arthur up as a quiet family guy sort of thing, and then he gets this mysterious phone call (drug dealer or something? Sure we'll find out soon enough), and he's obviously not as wholesome as we think. Very well done that.