[Grimjust Bearegular]

Here's my second entry to the MAG-contest. A Quorl! The style is quite different from the Fener painting, I decided to try something new.I've just a couple of different insects as reference and added stuff from my own head as well
So what do you think?


 quorl3.jpg (197.02K)
Number of downloads: 22

This post has been edited by Grimhilde: 21 July 2009 - 11:56 AM

[Aptorian]

I think it needs to be much, much bigger.

[Traveller]

Looks really good, but wings need to be bigger compared to the body - maybe with great big bug-eyes like a dragonfly, too.

Nice colours, like the saddles too!

This post has been edited by Traveller: 21 July 2009 - 12:47 PM

[Grimjust Bearegular]

Aptorian, on Jul 21 2009, 01:10 PM, said:

I think it needs to be much, much bigger.

Bigger how?

Traveller, on Jul 21 2009, 01:46 PM, said:

Looks really good, but wings need to be bigger compared to the body - maybe with great big bug-eyes like a dragonfly, too.

Nice colours, like the saddles too!

Ok, bigger wings, easily fixed.


Thanks!

[Aptorian]

Just bigger all in all. Much longer body, thicker, HUGE wings, etc.

[Traveller]

I wouldn't say much bigger - I get the impression they are a bit flimsy, and the ride is a bit unstable and uncomfortable, as they aren't that huge.

[Throne of War]

Grimhilde, on Jul 21 2009, 01:54 PM, said:

Aptorian, on Jul 21 2009, 01:10 PM, said:

I think it needs to be much, much bigger.

Bigger how?

Traveller, on Jul 21 2009, 01:46 PM, said:

Looks really good, but wings need to be bigger compared to the body - maybe with great big bug-eyes like a dragonfly, too.

Nice colours, like the saddles too!

Ok, bigger wings, easily fixed.


Thanks!


I think it's sick, dude! Well done, sir!

[caladanbrood]

I really like this. The insectile legs are excellent. I would agree with bigger wings though, and maybe an even more elongated "tail"... Overall extremely good though!

[Macros]

really good, I agree with the longer tail bigger wings though. I always invision and massive dragonfly

[Sinisdar Toste]

i agree with increasing the wing to body ratio, dragonflies and all that, other than that this is a pretty sick piece, well done

[Grimjust Bearegular]

Aptorian, on Jul 21 2009, 01:04 PM, said:

Just bigger all in all. Much longer body, thicker, HUGE wings, etc.

I'll try some stuff out, but I kinda agree with Traveller, that was my impression of them as well. The wings I agree with:)

Traveller, on Jul 21 2009, 01:13 PM, said:

I wouldn't say much bigger - I get the impression they are a bit flimsy, and the ride is a bit unstable and uncomfortable, as they aren't that huge.

My thoughts exactly!

Segulah #1, on Jul 21 2009, 03:38 PM, said:

Grimhilde, on Jul 21 2009, 01:54 PM, said:

Aptorian, on Jul 21 2009, 01:10 PM, said:

I think it needs to be much, much bigger.

Bigger how?

Traveller, on Jul 21 2009, 01:46 PM, said:

Looks really good, but wings need to be bigger compared to the body - maybe with great big bug-eyes like a dragonfly, too.

Nice colours, like the saddles too!

Ok, bigger wings, easily fixed.


Thanks!


I think it's sick, dude! Well done, sir!

Thnak you very much!

caladanbrood, on Jul 21 2009, 05:04 PM, said:

I really like this. The insectile legs are excellent. I would agree with bigger wings though, and maybe an even more elongated "tail"... Overall extremely good though!

Yeah, the tail is supposed to be like 20ft long, I think. I just ran out of space:P I'll definitely give it a longer tail and bigger wings.

Thank you!

Macros, on Jul 21 2009, 07:53 PM, said:

really good, I agree with the longer tail bigger wings though. I always invision and massive dragonfly

Duly noted:)

Thanks!

Sinisdar Toste, on Jul 22 2009, 04:08 AM, said:

i agree with increasing the wing to body ratio, dragonflies and all that, other than that this is a pretty sick piece, well done

Thank you!

[Ain't_It_Just_]

Heh, it looks so cute! It's a good translation, I think. Shades of green and blue are a nice touch.

[Grimjust Bearegular]

Ain't_It_Just_, on Jul 23 2009, 12:01 PM, said:

Heh, it looks so cute! It's a good translation, I think. Shades of green and blue are a nice touch.

he kinda does, yes Thank you!


Well, here's the new version where I've incorporated some of your suggestions:


 quorl4.jpg (181.94K)
Number of downloads: 12

[Corporal Nobbs]

Nice.
The longer tail and bigger wings are much better.
Good job on the transparency of the wings, it's a tricky thing to get right. (for me anyway)

[bwgan]

I think it's brilliant...I am constantly in awe of the talent on this forum...especially the artists...and whilst I would hate to be accused of bias, I love your work Grim...especially when you go easy on the poo!

[Grimjust Bearegular]

Corporal Nobbs, on Jul 25 2009, 11:42 AM, said:

Nice.
The longer tail and bigger wings are much better.
Good job on the transparency of the wings, it's a tricky thing to get right. (for me anyway)

Thanks!

bwgan, on Jul 25 2009, 11:54 AM, said:

I think it's brilliant...I am constantly in awe of the talent on this forum...especially the artists...and whilst I would hate to be accused of bias, I love your work Grim...especially when you go easy on the poo!

lol, indeed. Thank you

[Aptorian]

I like the changes.

Now the tail is longer I wonder what it would like if it was curled under it.

[Grimjust Bearegular]

Aptorian, on Jul 25 2009, 01:24 PM, said:

I like the changes.

Now the tail is longer I wonder what it would like if it was curled under it.

most probably just like on a dragonfly

[Grief]

Couple of things:

I think the picture would look better with some back, and in motion, soaring above a battlefield, or coral or mott wood etc.

I think the stillness of the picture makes it look rather odd, in particular the tail being held out behind perfectly straight.

Brilliant work as usual though

[Night Hawk]

Haha that's awesome, I always pictured a giant dragonfly...