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#41 User is offline   Chaos 

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Posted 08 September 2004 - 11:00 AM

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all right, to be honest, i didn't enjoy this as much as i did your other stuff, like the piece with pulling down stars, that was brilliant. or the rabbit roadkill.

Baverel


you liked the pulling down stars one? everytime i look back on that one i just think its a pile of shiit. you artists and your abstract way of looking at things Posted Image

and thanks for the sweet dreams wish although actually if i remember correctly i had a horrible dream in which i was going crazy but somehow still aware that i WAS going crazy. horrible dream. so i have you to thank for that do i? thanks a flippin' lot!!
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#42 User is offline   Orfantal 

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Posted 11 May 2004 - 06:56 AM

Bavvy - cheers, although I'm sure there's nothing limited about your understanding. Liked the little snippet.

Altahn - I didn't know there was a Discussion Board, is it hidden somewhere?
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Posted 30 September 2004 - 03:07 AM

Whoops... Posted Image
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#44 User is offline   Aimless 

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Posted 17 September 2004 - 11:59 AM

As in, I'd like to see you guys write some short and playful poems, silly Posted Image

As for my autobiography, that'll have to wait until I get married and get my career going. Sex and violence sells, after all Posted Image
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#45 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 29 August 2004 - 09:42 AM

ok, after like months i read it...or BOREDOM!!! cause this place is DEAD!!! Posted Image

and i have to say it is good...although...maybe too many facts too little poetry? i mean...it depends....plus wouldn't it be so much better if it rhymed? just think....lol Posted Image

stuff did come to my mind lately but i'm not satisfied with it, so i ain't posting it here Posted Image
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Posted 26 April 2004 - 12:24 PM

Thought I might post a piece I wrote a few years back, be gentle.

The Past Against the Present


Darkness rises from the deep
Levithian, stirred from sleep
Seeping from my broken head
Here to confront all my dead
Reason has gone, dismissed at last
Arise up chaos, from the past
One last scream, from inside
Another spear through tattered hide
The final banner
Suicide rush
Sudden clamour
Clinging crush
Then comes silence, from the grave
There's no-one left alive to save
The dead depart, all are gone
Obey the Siren's silent song
The sun soon rises, dawn is nearing
Memory fades, out of hearing
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#47 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 12 May 2004 - 12:44 AM

well, that's right, it is, tht's y i wrote that dreadful poem Posted Image Posted Image

all art is....hm...ok...so i'll blame this on you Posted Image
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Posted 12 May 2004 - 05:03 AM

Merci beaucoup Posted Image

"Eighty One" refers to the number of syllables--nine lines with nine syllables in each--as does "Three Cubed". The Sinking Road is just another life metaphor (stole the title from a song), and Blackberry Flail was a rush job where I'm not at all satisfied with the ending. "Dead Wood" was actually a joke of sorts, written for a very silly person, which is why it seems nonsensical Posted Image

Oh, and "Enchanted Glade" is one of those irritating poems where each stanza is a haiku, only I added a word in between them.
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Posted 17 October 2004 - 06:37 AM

quote:
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the last three verses... they're nice..but you really don't...well...never mind
hm...it's not a nice kind of poem, lol


Don't look down, daughter of the Queen
the rim of your dress stained with the dirt of my sky




yeah i know what you mean about those last three but ask and ye shall receieve. B)

love the quoted line above, its a beauty.

you might get a happy kinda piece from me, although i'm not promising Posted Image
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#50 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 24 April 2004 - 08:51 AM

right.....you know, ppl...whoever comes here, if anyone does...why in hood's name don;t you post any comments? Posted Image

i ususally don't have much to say, but you kno..learn from each toher n stuff... Posted Image

@Orfantal:
behind the smiles...well, the repetetive thing works well here imo, even tho i'll have to get a dicto in a mo n read it all again Posted Image

rolling the bones...errr....maybe i'm having a bad day Posted Image
nah, most lines sound very good, some just crumble up my perception of aesthetics, but that's another matter isn't it? hehehe Posted Image
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#51 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 19 July 2004 - 04:33 AM

Hawah... Posted Image Posted Image Posted Image bloody ludicrous!! Posted Image

Darkwatch..that's too long. Posted Image
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#52 User is offline   Farad 

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Posted 07 May 2004 - 09:23 AM

very good Posted Image

it reminds me of what i think when i stare at fire
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#53 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 06 April 2004 - 11:03 AM

mmmhmmm, hold on, it'll time to read em ^^''
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Posted 04 May 2004 - 08:48 AM

What have you done?
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#55 User is offline   Chaos 

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Posted 05 September 2004 - 04:29 PM

can;t bloody sleep Posted Image
which is the only reason i am posting this which i just found; due to the tenuous link that it says the word insomniacal. once Posted Image
written what seems like a long time ago, incredibly relevant right now, if only in the fact that i cant sleep! Posted Image

and yes, as those who knew me when i wrote stuff will no doubt have guessed, it isnt happy Posted Image

Blinking Cursor
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Insomincal daydreams to fill endless nights,
Staring at the glaring white screen,
Blinking cursor mocking me,
Offering a solace from words
That remain sadistically out of reach.

Mindless tunes blare through tinny speakers,
Monotonous drone of teenage angst,
The pointless and overly dramatic,
Reminding me why,
I've only got one day to die.

The empty tub beside me,
"Take one per day.
In the event of an overdose
Please ring the doctor immediately",
Lies next to the disconnected phone.

Razor blade in unsteady hands,
Pressed hard against veins,
Pumping dead lifeless blood
Through a young vibrant corpse
With millenia old eyes.

No revelation comes,
No salvation offered,
No dreams to hide in
Nothing but the blurry white screen
And the red red carpet on which i lie.
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Posted 26 April 2004 - 12:15 PM

My first time here, I must confess I have skipped to the later stuff on this thread for now. Orfantal, I like your writing, a bit beyond me though, at parts. I did like My Late Demise in particular, it seemed very wistful/bittersweet, which I liked.
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Posted 16 October 2004 - 02:06 AM

quote:
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the rumours are that Chaos is going to come up with a poem soon.


damn you. this has been playing on my mind for ages. well i've finally got the internet at my house so here it is. the last two verses are a late addition and it shows i think. technically... a **** it, you know what i think about technical aspects of my work Posted Image

this was written in a couple of mins on the back of my pad last year when i was round a mates house and he'd popped out i just had the urge to write.


Two dollar whore
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Reach for the bottle once more,
Top willingly coming undone in my hand
And the slender bottle leans forward suggestively,
flashing its neck at my captivated eyes.

I wet my lips on your honey nectar,
Feel the soft caress of you upon my tongue ,
And then you penetrate me
Filling my whole body with that sensual heat.

I'm giddy with lust for you,
Shaking hands fumble clumsily
lLke a teenage virgin,
Failing hard to arouse your gratitude.

Sweaty fingers fail to keep you close enough
And you fall from my grasp,
To the hard ground with a shattering scream
That makes me shudder in my love drugged slumber.

Brought back to life by a bitter sun
Bleary eyes see you lying down below,
Empty and used,
Empty and useless to me now.

Lurching to my feet
I make my way outside that world,
And start looking for what I want,
Another two dollar whore.
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Posted 17 December 2004 - 08:37 PM

Not my fault I was sick and had two weeks of homework pile up... oh nooosireeee. Of course I was deliberalty not commenting. I'll be back in a <enter measurment of time> Anyways...
Like it bav and Merry Christmas to you guys.
(I can't belive I have homework for the holidays)
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#59 User is offline   Farad 

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Posted 01 November 2004 - 03:34 PM

waouh bav , Posted Image

i really liked the one posted the 17th october Posted Image
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#60 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 16 November 2004 - 12:45 PM

Orfantal, this is the apogee of your oeuvre.

Nothing else that I would have to say.

*bows* Posted Image
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