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#121 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 15 May 2004 - 12:10 PM

dammit, orfantal y the hell r they so bloody long??? Posted Image Posted Image
yes, i kno all the swearing aint too poetic Posted Image Posted Image
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Posted 07 October 2004 - 02:41 PM

Here`S something for yah brain, milady...

Startling, blue eyes,
Daylight skin,
You evil woman!
Are the ultimate, SIN!
I Cannot deside wether,
Love or HATE!
But be damned sure,
I`ll bring my UZI to our DATE!
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#123 User is offline   Aimless 

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Posted 16 September 2004 - 12:27 PM

Still-Life

(Freeze-frame)

Let's play a game.
It's a simple set:
White bread and jam,
cuppa tea and me.

What mars this scene?
I've burst my dam--
Can you spot it?
Nothing's the same,

but it's still life.



That didn't work out like I wanted it to (though the symmetry worked, it was too short, and the content had to be changed to conform to syllables and rhyme-scheme). I think I'll just have to recycle it sometime in the future Posted Image

Now. Orfantal, quit messing Bav about, she can't help it if she's a ditsy blonde!!

Bavm quit messing Orfantal about. He can't help it if he's fallen prey to your textuality!!

*ducks and runs*
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#124 User is offline   Farad 

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Posted 11 May 2004 - 08:56 AM

easy i didn't find it Posted Image
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#125 User is offline   Orfantal 

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Posted 17 September 2004 - 05:05 AM

Aimless - more like shameless - anyway, Still life, interesting but I'm not sure I got it.

Bav - have now checked the album out Posted Image Posted Image- o to be young again

I do lurk a bit, unfortunately my access to the forum is pretty limited and while I used to contribute more across a number of areas, its difficult to do now. I do have the odd scan to see whats going on.
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#126 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 09 September 2004 - 02:10 PM

I can't Posted Image. either I'm dumb or Im sleepy.

I decided to um follow the trend Posted Image
don't blame me for copying you guys Chaos, Darkwatch n Aimless Posted Image
u set the trend so you should have foreseen this. is there a word like tht actually...?



So it seems they have tired
Of coming here every night

These dreams so unfaithful
You’ve not lost your sight

Traveler of these roads in this mind
Dried out earth rises in columns of dust.

Pilgrims who passed sometimes
Fled from this place so fast.

An unreal maladie
An imagined sadness
Plagues my cracked lips

A stream of cruel words
Tasteless
Stains my fingertips.

At dawn I polish my awakening mask
My sanity
That I will wear until dusk.



not a masterpiece but have i ever written any anyway?
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#127 User is offline   Orfantal 

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Posted 05 May 2004 - 02:00 AM

quote:
Originally posted by Baverel:
wait...


for what?

How about "Dance of Desperation"?
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#128 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 11 May 2004 - 12:47 AM

bravissimo for ashes, Orfantal, getting back into my limited range of understanding there mate Posted Image Posted Image
funny thingie from me, not ambitious or original or anything

However hard you may fight
Anger and weakness prevail
There can be no escape from the night
Even if you die with this day

farad knows the answer Posted Image damn easy Posted Image Posted Image
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#129 User is offline   Cause 

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Posted 10 September 2004 - 12:17 PM

Aah poetry must resist destroying post. Having just written English literature I must ask what on earth are you people doing. Poetry! thats what. Scary, I think I just dont get poetry. To me if you have something to say say it. Why hide it in metaphors and similes and complex imagery.

I apologise and mean no offence but poetry? Who knows maybe one day I may even like it. Their is a four line stanza from some poem that I like but when compared to the hundreds of poems I have to read four lines is not really that good.
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#130 User is offline   Farad 

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Posted 21 May 2004 - 03:13 PM

@ bav not that bad ta Posted Image Posted Image
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#131 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 05 May 2004 - 10:17 AM

people don't disappear, nothing disappears, it just changes its location.
this is a bad day. a very bad day. quite all right for writing terribly sad poems in terribly sad style. not sad cause it's full of despair, sad cos it's damn fecking crap and melodramatic. yeah, i need a rant.
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Posted 28 September 2004 - 05:31 AM

"hood...who did I copy there?"

Posted Image I know it! I do! Pick me! Please? Posted Image

I just noticed the code for the smiley got changed from jonzey to admin. Posted Image
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#133 User is offline   Orfantal 

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Posted 02 November 2004 - 06:36 AM

@ Apsalar - interesting, almost gives a staccato succession of images, like freeze frame. Don't know if this is what you intended. Picks out the innocence and curiosity of the child.

@ Bav - liked the second of these two better. The first one seemed just a bit too vague and mysterious. Happy stuff you, nah don't believe that. Posted Image I agree with Farad - the one on the 17th Oct was the best of the lot.
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#134 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 28 November 2004 - 10:49 AM

Alone in this house again
I'm crawling up the walls

I'm falling down the stairs
I'm lying on the floor

Alone in this house again
I'm crawling up the walls
I'm repeating over and over
hello? hello?

I'm opening all the windows
and screaming please come in

I'm locking all the doors
screaming I know I'll find you somewhere here

Alone in this house again
I'm crawling up the walls
trying to touch every place
that you might have touched.



written without any work really, just something that your mind dictates to you, it's so natural that I don't even know if it's good or not, so please tell me
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#135 User is offline   Orfantal 

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Posted 12 May 2004 - 04:52 AM

Bav - fancy blaming that on me. Posted Image

Aimless - good stuff. Why 81, does that mean something? "Sinking Road" I presumed was about death, liked it. "Enchanted Glade" didn't do much for me, but I liked "Why did I cross the street" a lot, especially the last line. "Blackberry Flail" was interesting, great title by the way, but I didn't like the repetition of Keeper - three times in the first section. "Dead Wood" I need to read a few times, it's definitely got some very good parts but I'm not sure about how it all hangs together.
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#136 User is offline   Orfantal 

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Posted 16 November 2004 - 02:22 AM

I don't know about a plague, but here's one I wrote on the train this morning.

Hall of Remembrance

As I walk through the marble hall of my memory,
I do not glance to either side
where a thousand oak panelled doors
stand tall and ominous.
My footsteps on the cold stone are silent,
the only sound my tortured breathing,
and though the hall is empty
I feel the crushing presence of all
that is held behind the doors
pressing all around me.

I march ever onwards, resolute,
eyes fixed firmly on the distant horizon,
constant in my concentration.
But as I toil on I see to my horror
that an end approaches.
I draw close and reach out a trembling hand
to touch the blank and empty wall
that blocks my way.

I stand afraid to turn,
skin crawling in horror,
as I hear the gentle sigh
of a thousand doors sliding open,
and my throat is torn raw
by the scream I let loose.
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#137 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 17 September 2004 - 09:00 AM

Aimless - Liked still life. A lot. Quite clever really. even though i had to do it again today and i swear to hood it was the last thing i wanted to draw *rollseyes*
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Posted 19 July 2004 - 08:12 AM

Thank you, it`s said that poetry comes best out of need not of meaning.
But the same has been said about leadership (Bush, Saddam) , so I might just be barking up the wrong beanstalk.
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#139 User is offline   Baverel 

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Posted 06 September 2004 - 11:09 PM

well, yes, Fried Toast...this is so...you! Posted Image

all right, to be honest, i didn't enjoy this as much as i did your other stuff, like the piece with pulling down stars, that was brilliant. or the rabbit roadkill.

hey back to the present.
'insomnical daydreams to fill endless nights' - this is the best line and it's quite genius when compared with the rest Posted Image

with wishes of sweet dreams
... Posted Image
Baverel
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Posted 04 May 2004 - 05:17 AM

Act of Worship is cheeky!

I liked them, particularily the phrasing of " a weapon of mass diversion". My Boy felt very personal, I almost felt like I was intruding reading it"!

Well done!
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